budding writer

what can i say, this is the one. look for these things though : - "You can leave, now." The attendant scurried away. you should have put 'said' after since ...

i love it. look forward to the next chapter. please notify me when it comes out. few things i saw : - "Hannah Erins! a period instead. - "Wow! Really!" ...

nice enough but you kind of used the 'i' word too much. try describe the things she sees alittle more. example : describe the bus, describe her house etc.... like ...

since you are a senior writer obiviously you write so well but this was ust too good. i could never write like that. few things : - Actually, it was ...

well, what have we here, another work of schasa. an exellent piece, really. *applaudes* this was great, you really got me into it. a agree with the other reviewers, it ...

hi, budding writer on spotlight. actually i didn't join today but i just want to get to know everyone here. first , lets see, my biography : i am turning ...

sorry to say this since you are new to this site and all but it really seemed like narnia. most of us here already know what might happen next so ...

first of all, thanks :D for informing me when this chapter went out. i loved the first chapter and the second chapter was great. this is only the second chapter ...

i really loved it. i am not really great at reviewing but i have to say you write like any professional author. i would like to point out a few ...

first thing i would say, you are really good. the description was very real, just the way somone would feel if they had gone on a diet. there are a ...

this story is awsome. i recomend that you name this 'the circle of past'. purrrrrfect. pm me !

i am the first one reviewing so might as well get on with it. this story was great but i am sure you can do much better. good job. :D ...

i don't really write poetry alot, but 'that' :arrow: poem was certainly good. i don't know about anyone else but i thought it was pretty intresting. i also kind of ...

i novel which i am writing now or maybe hoping to write since i get writers block pretty often is called 'before night falls'. i am still wondering how to ...

abit confusing really. :? seems like she came with a runaway horse because she doesn't even know the name and suddenly she knows or remembers. anyway pretty good. in the ...